2.How would you describe your attributes (characteristics) as a friend, a family member, or as a member of your community ?

I would describe myself as a loyal, honest, and
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trustworthy person. Friendships are like
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family to me because my friends are extremely valuable and always give me constructive
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approach and encourage me to overcome all difficulties. Those
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attributes are definitely important for me to continue to have
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with my precious friends for a long time.
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coherence cohesion
Your essay is lacking in structure. It appears more as a collection of statements rather than a coherent essay with a logical flow. Consider introducing your ideas with a clear opening statement, supporting them with more detailed explanations and examples, and then rounding them off with a conclusion that summarizes your key points.
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The essay is quite brief and lacks depth in addressing the prompt. You should expand on your ideas by explaining in more detail how you embody these characteristics, possibly by giving personal anecdotes or specific examples of your actions as a friend, family member, or community member. Additionally, ensure that the question is answered completely by addressing all aspects of the prompt, which includes your role in the family and community, not just friendship.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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