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the graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean Island in between 2010 and 2017

the graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean Island in between 2010 and 2017
#tourists #caribbean #island
The graph represents the numbers
in
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of
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 millions who stayed in two specific areas
such
 as staying
in
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on
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Cruise
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a Cruise
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ship
 and staying on
island
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an island
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 in
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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 in eight years since 2010 with the total number of visitors
of
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 both regions.
Overall
, all the visitors
of
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to
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 the Caribbean
Island
 including
cruise
ship
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ships
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 and on
island
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the island
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 increased despite
of
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some fluctuations from 2012 to 2017.
Firstly
,
although
 the number of travellers who stayed on
Cruise
ship
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ships
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 hovered
in
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between 2010 to 2017 time period, it reached up to 2
million
in
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last
year
. In 2010, nearly 0.25
people
 stayed
in
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Cruise
ship
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ships
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 and it was the same in 2012
although
 0.5
people
 preferred to stay
in
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there in 2011. Despite the fluctuation in 2011, it
has
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had
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 a significant increase after 2012 and it reached 2
million
 in 2017.
However
, there are 0.5
million
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enhancements
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 within one
year
 after 2016.
Secondly
,
people
 liked to stay on
island
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the island
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 than
cruise
ship
 in 2010 because 0.75
million
people
were stayed
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stayed
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 there
in
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this
year
.
This
 amount remained in
same
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the same
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 value in
following
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the following
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year
 and it increased dramatically up to 1.5 until 2013.
This
 is the maximum number of
the
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visitors who stayed on
island
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the island
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 and
this
 is the amount
of
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last
year
also
 despite
of
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the slight decrease
around
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of around
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 1.25 in 2016.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although, last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cruise, ship, island, million, year, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 7 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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