the graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean Island in between 2010 and 2017
The graph represents the numbers
in
millions who stayed in two specific areas Change preposition
of
such
as staying Linking Words
in
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on
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Cruise
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a Cruise
ship
and staying on Use synonyms
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island
in Add an article
an island
the island
Caribbean
in eight years since 2010 with the total number of visitors Correct article usage
the Caribbean
of
both regions.
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in
Overall
, all the visitors Linking Words
of
the Caribbean Change preposition
to
Island
including Use synonyms
cruise
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ship
and on Fix the agreement mistake
ships
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island
increased despite Add an article
the island
of
some fluctuations from 2012 to 2017.
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apply
Firstly
, Linking Words
although
the number of travellers who stayed on Linking Words
Cruise
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ship
hovered Fix the agreement mistake
ships
in
between 2010 to 2017 time period, it reached up to 2 Change preposition
apply
million
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in
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apply
last
Linking Words
year
. In 2010, nearly 0.25 Use synonyms
people
stayed Use synonyms
in
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on
Cruise
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ship
and it was the same in 2012 Fix the agreement mistake
ships
although
0.5 Linking Words
people
preferred to stay Use synonyms
in
there in 2011. Despite the fluctuation in 2011, it Rephrase
apply
has
a significant increase after 2012 and it reached 2 Wrong verb form
had
million
in 2017. Use synonyms
However
, there are 0.5 Linking Words
million
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enhancement
within one Fix the agreement mistake
enhancements
year
after 2016.
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Secondly
, Linking Words
people
liked to stay on Use synonyms
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island
than Correct article usage
the island
cruise
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ship
in 2010 because 0.75 Use synonyms
million
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people
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were stayed
there Change to the active voice
stayed
in
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apply
this
Linking Words
year
. Use synonyms
This
amount remained in Linking Words
same
value in Add an article
the same
following
Add an article
the following
year
and it increased dramatically up to 1.5 until 2013. Use synonyms
This
is the maximum number of Linking Words
the
visitors who stayed on Correct article usage
apply
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island
and Add an article
the island
this
is the amount Linking Words
of
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apply
last
Linking Words
year
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also
despite Linking Words
of
the slight decrease Change preposition
apply
around
1.25 in 2016.Change preposition
of around
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although, last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cruise, ship, island, million, year, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 7 times.
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