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Many people believe that international tourism is a bad thing for their country. What are the reasons? Solutions to change negative attitudes

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It is widely argued that global
tourism
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 has a negative impact on destination resorts and countries.
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 there is a strong case for
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 view, solutions must be applied to resolve some of the serious issues which have arisen. There are two primary reasons why local residents often consider international
tourism
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 as a cause of serious problems in their countries. One reason is that it may have an adverse impact on traditional customs and indigenous practices, because tourists may be insensitive towards the feelings of local residents.
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, some
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 holidaymakers visiting developing Southeast Asian countries may be rowdy or wear unsuitable clothes, which might have an undesirable influence on local young people who copy immodest or provocative behaviour and fashions. Another reason is that tourists often pollute or litter beauty spots and several famous beaches in Vietnam,
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 as Cua Lo and Sam Son, have been spoiled by
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 lack of respect for the local environment. Measures must be taken by governments and international bodies to change negative attitudes.
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, the undoubted economic benefits of international
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 for local economies ought to be more widely promoted through the official media. International tourists spend money in shops and restaurants and create jobs in service industries and
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 aspect must be publicised. At the same time, tourist agencies should urge visitors to respect the local customs and culture of their hosts.
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, bodies
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 as the World
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 Organisation must enforce strict regulations on the
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 industry, ensuring that local operators are responsible for clearing litter and disposing of waste in ways that do not harm the environment, and issuing international Blue Flags to indicate clean beaches. In conclusion, only by addressing the concerns of local people will negative attitudes to international
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 be changed.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the essay has a clear and logical structure throughout, with well-developed paragraphs that each focus on a single idea. Use a range of cohesive devices, but make sure they are used accurately to help the argument flow.
task achievement
Address all parts of the task, ensuring that your opinion is clear and expands on all aspects of the prompt. Provide a balanced view with well-supported ideas and examples. Make your concluding statement effectively summarise your position without introducing new ideas.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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