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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for production and consumption of electricity in 2014

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for production and consumption of electricity in 2014
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The given bar chart illustrates the rank of ten different
countries
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 in terms of how much
electricity
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 was produced and consumed in the year 2014.
Overall
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, all
countries
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, except Germany generated more
electricity
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 than their consumption.
Additionally
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, China was the highest
electricity
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 producer and consumer,
while
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 Korea was the least. China, the US and Russia were the top three
countries
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 that consumed more than 1 trillion
kWh
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 of
electricity
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 throughout the period. China’s consumption alone was 5322
billion
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Kwh
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, which was more than six times Japan’s.
In contrast
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, Korean only consumed around 449
billion
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kWh
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 in 2014. In the same period, the top three
electricity
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 producers were China, the US and Russia which generated 5398, 4099 and 1057
billion
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kWh
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, respectively.
Conversely
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, the other seven
countries
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 that produced less than 1 trillion
kWh
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 were India, Canada, France, Brazil and Germany. Uniquely, Germany was the only country to consume
electricity
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 more than it produced. It consumed 582.5
billion
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kwh
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, which was 55,9
billion
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kwh
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 more than its output.
Moreover
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, Korea, the country with the lowest consumption of
electricity
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, became the lowest producer with an output
less
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of less
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 than 500
billion
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kWh
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.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, electricity, kwh, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • megawatt-hours (MWh)
  • electricity grid
  • renewable energy sources
  • fossil fuels
  • energy efficiency
  • consumption patterns
  • power generation
  • industrial demand
  • residential use
  • transmission losses
  • energy imports
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • energy policy
  • capacity
  • infrastructure
  • demand and supply
  • electrification
  • energy security
  • grid reliability
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