The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The diagram provides information about how the
bricks
are produced for the building industry.
Overall
,
this
process involves 7 stages and several ingredients,
such
as
clay
, sand, and water. It begins with the digging up of
clay
and finishes with the packaging and delivery of the created
bricks
.
The first step is
to dig up the
clay
using a digger. The
clay
is
then
put onto a metal grid to make it into little pieces that
subsequently
go on a roller.  At
this
point the
clay
is mixed with sand and water;
next,
to form the
bricks
, the mixture is either put in a mould or cut by a wire cutter. Once the procedure to form them is finished, the created
bricks
need to be dried in a drying oven for 24-48 hours. After that, the dried
bricks
go through two kilns, the first one has a temperature between 200°C and 980°,
whereas
the second one's temperature is 870°C-1300°C. Once the heating operation is completed, the
bricks
rest for 48-72 hours in a cooling chamber and are
then
ready to be packed and delivered.
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