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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram shows the procedure for university entry for high school graduates. Write a report for a university or college lecturer describing the information. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram shows the procedure for university entry for high school graduates. Write a report for a university or college lecturer describing the information. You should write at least 150 words.
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The diagram illustrates the university entrance procedure for high school
fresh
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graduates.
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,It is clear
thet
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that
 the primary requirement is holding a
highschool
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high school
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 degree and the
application
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 process through different scenarios and the final
anouncement
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announcement
 is to be
the
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welcome
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 to the university or cancel the
application
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. To start,the
complted
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completed
application
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 which
downloaded
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is downloaded
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 through the website is submitted to Administration and
directed
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 to
categorized
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be categorized
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to
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as
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 rejection,provinsial acceptance and the
applians
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applicants
 who
fullfill
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fulfil
 the requirements
directed
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 to the enrollment process.
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Application
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 which are rejected go through a cyclic process and can
re-apply
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be re-apply
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 to the admin with alternative
cources
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sources
courses
.
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Moreover
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 the provisial acceptance needed more documentation and when the compilation of documentation is done ,
then
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 again submitted to the Admin.
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Further more
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,the
application
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 which
accepted
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was accepted
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from
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by
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 the admin,qualified for
the
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apply
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enrollment.
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 go through
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words application with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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