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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course.The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course.The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie graph illustrates the destination of students who finished their Anthropology degree,
while
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 the table
illustrastes
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illustrates
 the earnings of
peopl
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people
 who studied
this
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 course after five years of
work
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.
Overall
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, it is noticeable that the number of
people
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 in full-time
work
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 is larger than in any other area. We
also
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 can see that there is a higher salary working in the government sector. Looking at the pie chart, we can see that the majority of
people
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 after graduating
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had a full-time job, to be precise, 52%. 15% had
a part-time
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part-time work
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work
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 and 12% were unemployed.
People
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 studying a
posgraduate
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postgraduate
 and working full-time or part-time were in
minority
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the minority
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, with only 8% and 5% respectively, and there is an 8% of
people
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 that we don't know what they are doing. There is a higher wage for
people
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 who
work
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in
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the
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freelance consultants and in the government sector,
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in which
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which
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where
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 80% of individuals
had
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 a salary above $75,000,
while
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 in private companies only 55% receive
this
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 wage. In the private
comapanies
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companies
people
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's
earning
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 are normally between $50,000 and $74,999, specifically
a
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35% and 10% with wages between $25,000 and $49,999. There is the same percentage of
people
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 with a salary between $25,000 to $49,999 and $50,000 to $74,999 in freelance consultants and in the government sector, which are 5% and 15% respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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