The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. You should write at least 150 words.
The bar graph compares the transportation methods
that
used to travel to and from work in a European city in three different years.
Correct pronoun usage
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Overall
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It is clear that
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,
there were significant changes every year and the percentage of people who used cars increased dramatically and showed an inverse trend for the bus.
Remove the comma
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To begin
with,In 1960 ,Linking Words
most
popular transportation method was Correct article usage
the most
bus
, about just below 40% and approximately 27% of people used the tube.Add an article
a bus
the bus
Additionally
,the usage of Linking Words
train
was around 18% ,Fix the agreement mistake
trains
whereas
the cars were the category that used the lowest amount of commuters,about 7%.Linking Words
Furthermore
,aster the next two decades,trends changed considerably,Linking Words
whereas
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the
buses and trains were at the top, Correct article usage
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accounted
approximately 28% Wrong verb form
accounting for
while
the percentage of individuals who used cars climbed up to 23%.Linking Words
However
, the use of tubes dropped by 5% during the time period.
In the following year,in 2000 ,there was a significant Linking Words
raise
in car users, reaching Correct your spelling
rise
to
just below 40% and the proportion of users that travelled by tube and train Change preposition
apply
were
25% Change the verb form
was
and
22%.Correct word choice
apply
finally
, the commuters who used buses as there transportation way were gradually went down over the period and accounted 15% in 2000.Linking Words
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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