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The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. You should write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. You should write at least 150 words.
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The bar graph compares the transportation methods
that
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used to travel to and from work in a European city in three different years.
Overall
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there were significant changes every year and the percentage of people who used cars increased dramatically and showed an inverse trend for the bus.
To begin
 with,In 1960 ,
most
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 popular transportation method was
bus
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a bus
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, about just below 40% and approximately 27% of people used the tube.
Additionally
 ,the usage of
train
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trains
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 was around 18% ,
whereas
 the cars were the category that used the lowest amount of commuters,about 7%.
Furthermore
,aster the next two decades,trends changed considerably,
whereas
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buses and trains were at the top,
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 approximately 28%
while
 the percentage of individuals who used cars climbed up to 23%.
However
, the use of tubes dropped by 5% during the time period. In the following year,in 2000 ,there was a significant
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 in car users, reaching
to
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just below 40% and the proportion of users that travelled by tube and train
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 25%
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22%.
finally
, the commuters who used buses as there transportation way were gradually went down over the period and accounted 15% in 2000.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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