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The graph above shows the stock price of four technology companies between 2011 and 2016.

The graph above shows the stock price of four technology companies between 2011 and 2016.
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The graph above shows the stock price of four technology companies between 2011 and 2016. The graph illustrates the stock cost of four internet companies from 2011 to 2016. Despite Apple company which came to the highest price has
own
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its own
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 considerable variation,
but
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apply
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Google, which illustrates with red line
to remain
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remains
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 constant. The innovation firm
of
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apply
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Apple started
from
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with
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5000
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a 5000
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 merchandise cost and
this
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 number
presents
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presented
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a
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apply
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considerable growth until
reach
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reached
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to
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apply
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the highest number
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while
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in
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 a year,
before
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apply
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the level
off
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of
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 approximately
same
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the same
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 price and some fluctuation. The starting and termination point of Apple could end at the same point as 5000 after all these fluctuations. The other companies which
called
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are called
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 Facebook and Yahoo, shown by green and blue lines respectively began from the highest point just over
the
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apply
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5000 in 2011. These businesses will
significant
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significantly
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 increase and decrease respectively from 2011 to 2016. The other technology corporation which
named
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is named
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 Google has not any variation that started with 0 and remain stable over the 5 years.
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