The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.
The diagram displays the stepwise process of producing
sugar
from sugar
cane.
Overall
, the process of making sugar
contains 7 steps such
as growing, harvesting, making juice
, purifying, making syrup
, centrifuging, and the last
drying and cooling.
The first step is
to grow sugar
cane, which takes 12-18 months. After growing it, a harvesting process may take place, there are two ways to harvest - manually or mechanically. If it is mechanically, a combined machine collects sugar
cane, while
manually, people harvest them by hand, using some tools. Next,
harvested sugarcanes experience crushing, when they convert into juice
.
Then
, the juice
is purified through a limestone filter to start evaporating it. In order to make syrup
, purified sugar
juice
heats up in a special container. Afterwards, hot syrup
centrifuges, as a result
, the syrup
separates from sugar
crystals. Finally
, the sugar
crystals need to dry and cool, so the final product is sugar
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