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the tables below give information about the world population and distribution in 1950 and 2000, with an estimate of the situation in 2050. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the tables below give information about the world population and distribution in 1950 and 2000, with an estimate of the situation in 2050. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The data given displays the amount
world
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 population and the percentage of people distribution in 1950 and 2000
as well as
 the expectations for 2050.
Overall
 the
world
populatios
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population
populations
 significantly increased in the three years date
while
 the distributions pattern shows changes based on the continents. The
world
 population had increased from 2.5
billions
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billion
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 in 1950 to 6.0
billions
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billion
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 in 2000, expecting the number
grows
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grow
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into
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to
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 9.0
billions
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billion
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 in 2050. The
signficant groth
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Significant growth
 will
happens
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happen
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 in Africa with 20%
humans
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of humans
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 will live there in 2050, increasing the population from just 9% in 1950. Meanwhile,
Asia
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the Asia
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 region still become the house of 59%
humans
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of humans
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 in
world
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the world
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 by 2050, the
numbers
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number
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is
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are
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 slightly
drop
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dropping
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 compared to the year 2000 with 60%. The populations in
europe
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Europe
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 shows dramatically declined from 22% in
year
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the year
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 2000 to 7% in the year 2050. The
declined
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declining
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 trends
also
 happened in North America with
2
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a 2
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%
dropped
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drop
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 between 1950 and 2000, predicting
1
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a 1
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% loss as well in 2050. The other regions like
Ocenia
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Oceania
looks
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look
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 stable with around 1%
populations
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population
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 over the period
while
 Latin America showed
slightly
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a slightly
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 increased from 6% in 1950 to 9% in 2000
then
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than
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 expected to stay at 9% in 2050.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words world with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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