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The charts below show the chanages in ownership of electical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

The charts below show the chanages in ownership of electical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
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The given line chart represents the usage of electrical appliances and household working
hours
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 in a country for the given duration from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
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 details provide a clear statement that, As the consumption of
elecrical
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electrical
 appliances increase
impact
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the impact
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 the
hours
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 utilised for household work. The first line chart explains that washing
machine
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machines
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ws
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was
 used by 40
percentage
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per cent
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 of people in the country during 1920. Meanwhile, Vacuum cleaner was used by only 3 out of 10 people. But the refrigerator was not
into
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in
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 the picture at that time. After two decades all
the
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three electrical appliances were commonly found in half of the population. As years passed by, Refrigerator and vacuum cleaner was found in almost every house in
20th
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the 20th
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 century. The consumption of washing
machine
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machines
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 too showed a
drastical
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drastic
 growth. The second line chart shows the number of
hours
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 of housework like washing clothes, preparing meals and cleaning in a country. As
hours
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shows
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show
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 a downward trend of 50
hours
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 in 1920 to 10
hours
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 in 2019.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • appliance ownership
  • technological advancements
  • housework
  • efficiency
  • innovation
  • economic growth
  • societal roles
  • gender dynamics
  • automation
  • manual labor
  • domestic chores
  • leisure time
  • quality of life
  • smart technology
  • artificial intelligence
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