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The graph below shows the consumtion of 3 spreads from 1981 to 2007

The graph below shows the consumtion of 3 spreads from 1981 to 2007
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The line graph illustrates the amount of three kinds of spreads (
margarine
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, low fat and reduced spreads and
butter
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) which were consumed over 26
years
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 from 1981 to 2007. Units are measured in
grams
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.
Overall
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, the consumption of
margarine
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 and
butter
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 decreased over
period
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the period
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 given
while
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 for
low fat
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low-fat
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 and reduced spreads, it rose. At the start of the period,
butter
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 was the most popular spread, which was replaced by
margarine
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 from 1991 to 2001, and following that low fat and reduced spreads became the most widely used spread in the final
years
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. With regards to the amount of
butter
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 used, it began at around 140
grams
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 and
then
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 peaked at 160
grams
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 in 1986 before falling dramatically to about 50
grams
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 in the
last
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 year.
Likewise
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, approximately 90
grams
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 of
margarine
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 was eaten in the first year after which the figure fluctuated slightly and dropped to a low of 40
grams
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 in 2007.
On the other hand
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, the consumption of low fats and reduced spreads only started in 1996 at about 10
grams
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.
This
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 figure, which reached a high of just over 80
grams
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 5
years
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 later, fell slightly in the final
years
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 to approximately 70
grams
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 in 2007.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words margarine, butter, years, grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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