Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Being a useful
member
of
society
is a concept which should be
tought
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taught
to
children
either by
parents
or
school
. Some people consider
parents
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responsibilities
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responsibility
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to do it,
while
others think
school
is
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the place to teach suitable
manner
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manners
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to
children
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this
topic in
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essay and
finally
represent my own viewpoint.
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Since
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their birthday,
parents
are responsible people for
breeding
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raising
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their
children
until
starting
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they start
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education at
school
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at
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for
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at
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6 years
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According to
psychology science,
this
period makes
real
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the real
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personality of
children
.
Therefore
, teaching suitable
manner
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manners
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to
children
is considered
as
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a
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significant duty of
parents
who have brought their
children
on the earth.
Personality
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of a human determines his/her manners. so, any bad
behavior
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behaviour
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of
parents
results in personality
disorder
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disorders
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of
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children
.
Parents
should teach good
behavior
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behaviour
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to their
children
to be
a
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good
member
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members
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of
society
. there are many ways for them to do
this
duty.
For example
,
parents
should encourage their
children
to like their friends and play with each other
through
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by
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avoiding fighting or cursing.
Also
,
parents
should teach politeness and
human kind
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humankind
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should live among others, he/she should be able to communicate politely are respectfully, and
flexible
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a flexible
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manner
is necessary in
this
field.
On the other hand
,
school
is an educational
center
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centre
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where
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that
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all people start going there
since
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in
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childhood.
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pass
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half of a day at
school
for
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learning science and moral
manner
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manners
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.
Teachers
poses
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pose
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special social positions among
students
.
Therefore
, their
manner
and speeches influence significantly on
children
, even more than
parents
.
Teachers
should induce correct manners
to
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students
at
school
.
For example
,
teachers
should teach thinking
skill
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skills
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to
students
to enable them
make
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to make
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correct
decision
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decisions
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and
solving
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solve
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their problems by themselves. If
students
learn
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correct
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the correct
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thinking
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methods
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method
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, they do not make
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problems
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problem
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problems
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for others.
In addition
, they do not fear because they are hopeful and continue their way
until
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to
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success.
Teachers
should teach
students
identifying
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to identify
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their purposes and
planning
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plan
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to reach them. In conclusion, I think both
of
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parents
and
teachers
at
school
are responsible for teaching correct manners and thinking to
children
to enable them to be
a
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apply
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good
member
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members
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in
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of
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their
society
. Talking does not work, but teaching suitable skills
influence
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influences
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on thinking system of
students
and
enable
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enables
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them to act correctly in
society
which results in being a good
member
in
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of
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society
who loves humankind and
help
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helps
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them and
work
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works
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and
live
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lives
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well with them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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