the diagram shows the museum and its surrounding in 1990 and 2010

The map compares areas which were near a museum as it was in the year 1990 with a redesigned plan in 2010.

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it is clear that

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the main changes for 2010 involved the introduction of a new cafe. There were no plans to change the main road and location of the museum. In 1990, a car park and a garden were separated by a line running to the path. By 2010, as the car park was expanded, the original garden had to be demolished.

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, the trees were relocated and moved beside the expanded car park, and no changes were made to the main road. Over the same period, the path was reduced in width in order to enlarge the area which consisted of a store room, entrance, shop and a cottage in the year 1990. To be precise, the

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was extended and there were many free spaces beside it, the shop was developed bigger and the cottage was replaced by the cafe.

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the diagram shows the museum and its surrounding in 1990 and 2010

Extreme sports such as sky diving and sking very dangerous and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Many animal species in the world are becoming extinct nowadays. Some people say that countries and individuals should protect these animals from dying out, while others say that we should concentrate more on the problems of human beings. Discuss both views and give your opinion.