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In some countries around the world, men and women are having babies late in life. What are the reasons? Is it a positive or negative development?

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Having a family is meant to be a personal reason, but there tends to be a slight shift in wanting
babies
. All of us have been culturally driven to get married and settle down in life as soon as we hit our first job, but nowadays people think a million times before getting into a
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marriage
marraige
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marriage
 and a lot of men and women choose to have
babies
 late in
thier
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their
 life for multiple reasons which
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 will discuss below in
this
 essay Having
babies
 late in life
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 its own advantages like more privacy, it gives the couple a chance to understand
each-other
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 in a better way, navigate their relationship problems and
finally
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 a hold of
eachother's
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each other's
 likes and dislikes. It
aslo
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also
 allows them to spend more quality time with
eachother
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each other
 before they take up
this
 huge
responsibilty
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responsibility
. Having a secure lifestyle
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 is one of the major reasons couple push their
baby
 dreams. The inflation rate is rising above the sea level, and being financially healthy has been quite a task for the young generation. With proper awareness and a lot of observations made by the current generation, they tend to delay having a
baby
 until they are not financially strong. The younger generation has very well understood the fact to "live for ourselves" not for
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society. Our parents and the past generations were highly influenced by
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society and strictly followed the norms set by
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society, which led to a lot of couples having
babies
 just for the sake of it. Now people analyse their situation and try to think it through if they really want to have a
baby
. In conclusion,
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 would say
this
 is a positive
developement
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development
 as people are aware
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 their
decisons
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decisions
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 and choose to time their pregnancy. They are well prepared mentally and financially ready for a
baby
, it
also
 helps in leading a smooth and secure lifestyle with fewer hurdles.
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Your response ticks many of the right boxes for task completion; you've addressed the prompt, provided reasons for the trend, and offered your view on whether it's positive or negative. However, the development of these points would benefit from more depth, elaboration, and specific examples. Provide clear, detailed, and relevant examples to give weight to your arguments. Elaborate on the implications and consequences of the trend discussed, for individuals and perhaps for society, to enhance the comprehensiveness of your ideas.

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