graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040

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The line graph provides information about the proportion of populations that changed from 1970 to 2020 and the estimated number of populations that will grow for 10 to 20 years in four ASEAN countries.

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, it can be seen that there was an increase in percentage in three countries for 30 years;

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, the Philippines had fluctuated. Indonesia, Malaysia, and Thailand have been always increasing,

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Malaysia has been increasing drastically from 30

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to 75

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over 50 years, Thailand rose slowly and almost flatted from 29

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to 30

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between 1990 to 2020. Even though Indonesia started

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maintained to grow sharply from 14

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to approximately 50

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in 2020. Despite starting highest, the Philippines had fluctuated over 5 decades.

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, it was still maintained to gain population in 2020 by 12

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. Malaysia obtains the highest number of estimates of increasing population for 2030 and 2040 with approximately 80

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. It is followed by Indonesia with 60

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. 50

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is occupied by the Philippines in the third place.

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graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040

Multinational companies have become increasingly common in developing countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this method?

Some people believe that the internet has made books and libraries obsolete. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Provide reason and support with examples.

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