graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040

graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040
The line graph provides information about the proportion of populations that changed from 1970 to 2020 and the estimated number of populations that will grow for 10 to 20 years in four ASEAN countries.
Overall
, it can be seen that there was an increase in percentage in three countries for 30 years;
however
, the Philippines had fluctuated. Indonesia, Malaysia, and Thailand have been always increasing,
while
Malaysia has been increasing drastically from 30
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to 75
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over 50 years, Thailand rose slowly and almost flatted from 29
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to 30
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between 1990 to 2020. Even though Indonesia started
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lowest, it
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maintained to grow sharply from 14
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to approximately 50
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in 2020. Despite starting highest, the Philippines had fluctuated over 5 decades.
However
, it was still maintained to gain population in 2020 by 12
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. Malaysia obtains the highest number of estimates of increasing population for 2030 and 2040 with approximately 80
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. 50
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is occupied by the Philippines in the third place.
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place is Thailand with an estimated number of around 40
percent
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • Asian countries
  • living in cities
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • introduction
  • overview
  • trend
  • body paragraph
  • compare
  • predicted percentages
  • summarize
  • closing statement
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