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Task 1 Describing a process The pictures below show how tomato ketchup is made. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

#process #pictures #show #tomato #ketchup #summarise #information #features
In these
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These
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 pictures
illustrates
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illustrate
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 how tomato
sauce
 is produced and how
they
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it
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get
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gets
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 to your plate. There are 15 stages in the diagram from the picking of the tomatoes to
enjoy
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enjoying
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it
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them
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 with
a
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an
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 amazing burger and fries.
The first step is
 to harvest and place them in a basket where they are sorted by the goods and
bads
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bad
 tomatoes, which
then
 they are transported to the factory by trucks. There they clear out the impurities of the tomatoes.
After
this
process
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process,
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 they are placed in a particular vessel to be
squash
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squashed
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 and
mix
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mixed
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 with other important ingredients
as
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such as
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 sugar, salt and vinegar and
then
 cook it until it starts to boil. after the
sauce
cool
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cools
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 down for two hours, it
then
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is then
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 stored in
their
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its
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 proper container and labeled. In order to be shipped to the supermarkets the tomato
sauce
 goes through
quality
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a quality
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 check to make sure everyone can enjoy an amazing
sauce
 back home.
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coherence cohesion
You need to ensure that the essay is well-structured with clear progression through the stages described. Paragraphing could be used more effectively to delineate the different stages of the process.
coherence cohesion
You should include both an introduction and a conclusion to frame your description; the introduction should outline the process and the conclusion should summarize the key points or implications of the process.
coherence cohesion
Support each stage of the process with relevant details. Avoid being too general and ensure that you reference specific parts of the diagram to provide a more thorough explanation.
task achievement
Make sure you fully describe all parts of the process as indicated in the diagram. The use of singular ('basket', 'vessel') instead of plural ('baskets', 'vessels') and insufficient detail in many steps indicates that more attention to completeness and specificity is necessary.
task achievement
Focus on clarifying your ideas and organizing them logically to enhance comprehensibility. Avoid run-on sentences and aim to present one idea per sentence.
task achievement
Provide specific examples or descriptions from the diagram to support your statements. This helps the reader visualize the process more accurately and grounds your writing in concrete detail.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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