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The best way to solve the world's environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Fuel
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is one of the most important resources known to humankind.Plays an important role in our daily life.
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,it causes environmental problems.It is agreed that the best way to solve
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 problem is to
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 the price of gas. To start with,a rise in the material price might be the solution to the problem but that cannot
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 for too long.Rising costs
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 as petrol, oil, and natural gases could help address global issues. Industrial sectors, especially fossil fuel power plants, ought to find alternative energy sources inclusive of nuclear and renewable energy to replace them with.
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 would lead to fewer greenhouse gases and emissions which are released into the atmosphere,
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 mitigate global warming and pollution. Another reason is that,if they increase the cost of fuel,individuals will use
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electric cars,bicycles or public transportation
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 of driving private cars.
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,
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 help reduce the number of exhaust fumes produced in the atmosphere.
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,to reduce carbon dioxide emissions which
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 from vehicles,we should
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buy hybrid or electric cars.
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:Tesla model X,Zeekr 009,Mercedes-Benz EQS.
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 the increasing petrol costs could somewhat contribute to the improvement of our living conditions. There
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end
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 number of cons of ammunition but we cannot deny the pros of the gas.

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Coherence and Cohesion
The essay lacks a clear and logical structure. There is no clear introduction, body, and conclusion that clearly expresses the candidate's position and develops arguments systematically. To improve, ensure that each paragraph contains one main idea supported by relevant explanations and examples. Additionally, make use of cohesive devices to guide the reader smoothly from one point to the next.
Task Achievement
While the task is generally addressed, there are limited clear and comprehensive ideas presented to support the argument. Responses should be developed more fully with detailed explanations and arguments that directly relate to the thesis. It's important to clearly state whether you agree or disagree with the statement and then consistently maintain and justify that stance throughout the essay.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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