The best way to solve the world's environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Fuel
,
is one of the most important resources known to humankind.Plays an important role in our daily life.Remove the comma
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However
,it causes environmental problems.It is agreed that the best way to solve this
problem is to grow
the price of gas.
To start with,a rise in the material price might be the solution to the problem but that cannot Verb problem
raise
last
for too long.Rising costs such
as petrol, oil, and natural gases could help address global issues. Industrial sectors, especially fossil fuel power plants, ought to find alternative energy sources inclusive of nuclear and renewable energy to replace them with. This
would lead to fewer greenhouse gases and emissions which are released into the atmosphere, as well as
mitigate global warming and pollution.
Another reason is that,if they increase the cost of fuel,individuals will use to
electric cars,bicycles or public transportation Change preposition
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instead
of driving private cars. Therefore
, this
could also
help reduce the number of exhaust fumes produced in the atmosphere.Therefore
,to reduce carbon dioxide emissions which comes
from vehicles,we should Correct subject-verb agreement
come
to
buy hybrid or electric cars.Change the verb form
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For instance
:Tesla model X,Zeekr 009,Mercedes-Benz EQS.
To sum up
, although
the increasing petrol costs could somewhat contribute to the improvement of our living conditions. There is
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are
end
number of cons of ammunition but we cannot deny the pros of the gas.Correct your spelling
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