You have moved to another city but your bank has your old address and continues to send all communication there. Write a letter to your bank branch. In the letter, mention: Where have you moved to? What problem are you facing regarding the bank’s communication? What you want them to do regarding old communication already sent to the wrong address?

Dear Sir/
Madam'
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I am writing
this
letter regarding my all
the
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offical
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official
letters as they
are
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have been
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sent to
previous
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the previous
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address from
last
month onwards. Well, I am Navneet Kaur and my Bank Account number with Scotia is A123456899. I have moved from Toronto, M1X2D2 to 106 Kirby Avenue, Collingwood, ON, L9Y4C5. Actually, I tried to change my address online through the app
unfortunately
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, I was not
sucessful
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successful
and I
had
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not received any bank mail from November 1, 2023.
Moreover
, my debit card is getting expired
this
month and I think
that
is
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is also sent
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also
send to my old location.
Furthermore
, I have received a few
complication
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with my insurance payments as well. I request you to update my home address from Toronto to Collingwood. If my current branch is able to resend
my
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all my
last
month
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month's
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mails to my new location
along with
the new debit card that will be a great help and I would really appreciate that.
Your
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Sincerely, Navneet Kaur.
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coherence cohesion
To improve clarity and logical structure within your letter, consider organizing the information more effectively. Each paragraph should contain a clear main idea, and the points should be expanded on in a logical order, ensuring seamless transitions between thoughts.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter are mostly appropriate. However, the greeting could be enhanced by including an appropriate salutation, such as 'To whom it may concern,' if the recipient's name is unknown.
task achievement
For task achievement, ensure that you address all the points required by the prompt clearly and concisely. Expand on the issues faced due to the incorrect address more elaborately, like the impact on your daily banking activities and why receiving mail at your new address is crucial.
task achievement
To maintain a suitable writing tone, it's important to remain formal and polite. Your letter generally maintains this tone, but vigilance to keep consistency in formality is recommended throughout the letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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