The charts show information about the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 who were employed in four countries in 1970 and 2000.

The charts show information about the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 who were employed in four countries in 1970 and 2000.
The graphs illustrate the proportion of males and females employed in four distinct countries (Belgium, USA, Japan, Indonesia), and aged between 60-64 in 1970 and 2000.
Overall
, we can see that the percentage of
men
was slightly higher than
women
in 1970.
On the other hand
,
this
difference
rose in 2000.
In addition
, the total
number
of people who fit
this
category decreased. In 1970, in the USA the
number
of male
employers
accounted for nearly 85%, and the
number
of
women
employers
was slightly less at around 79%. But in 2000, the
number
of employees went down, especially
women
employees. When the total
number
of
men
employers
only declined by 6% the total
number
of
women
dropped by almost 40%, making the
difference
between
men
and
women
employers
almost 40%.
Similarly
, Belgium had a significant fall in the
number
of
employers
and a climb in the
difference
between male and female
employers
. The
number
of
women
employers
plunged by 50%,
whereas
men
's
employers
decreased by 20%, making the total
number
of male
employers
almost 5 times as
women
.
On the other hand
, the
difference
between male and female
employers
didn’t increase in Japan. Indeed, it declined from 20% to almost 0%.
Likewise
, in Indonesia the
difference
almost didn’t change, and the total
number
of
men
and
women
employed only dropped by 15%.
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