Nuclear Energy is a better choice for meeting increasing demand. Do you agree or disagree?

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and competitive debates have been held on the topic of

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nuclear

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. What are the advantages and disadvantages of using nuclear plants? What consequences can it have? In

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subject and justify both sides. It is known everywhere that the nuclei

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is an extreme downpour and if not utilized and looked after properly, it may have tearing consequences. Take,

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power

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plant in Chernobyl, Ukraine 1986. The explosion was destructive and caused dozens of people to experience serious radiation sickness and contamination. What’s

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is that the area with vegetation had been poisoned as well and until now children

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born with congenital defects

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that disastrous event.

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situation happened in the cities of Hiroshima and Nagasaki (Japan, 1945), except,

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time the atomic bomb was thrown intentionally by America. From the previous examples we can conclude that nuclear

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is hazardous weaponry,

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, it can be

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operated in a more reasonable way,

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, as one of the most sufficient and sustainable sources of

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. Nuclei plants are full of usefulness in

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of generating

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. The sustainability, resourcefulness, harmlessness and safety in total build up a flawless

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source. Japan, North Korea, USA and UK are already utilizing

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technology, and there are plenty of reasons for doing so. Because nuclear

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represents its full capacity only in the form of heat and radiation it does not damage our ecosystem even a little.

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, its abilities are almost infinite,

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the chain reaction of splitting atoms, its source never runs up and it

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out extraordinarily

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. Nuclear

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and plants are especially essential in our modern world.

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industrialization, globalization and other

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it is desired as it had never been.

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, we must know the facets and scopes of

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uncertain and perilous things because if we do not, the cost of it might be tremendous.

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Your essay presents the discussion but tends to waver in parts. Ensure a clear and logical flow of ideas from introduction through to conclusion.

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Try to present your arguments in a balanced way, discussing both sides equally before presenting your opinion, if required by the prompt.

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Be cautious with grammatical structure and vocabulary usage; errors can obscure meaning and impact the clarity of comprehensive ideas.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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329 words

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Nuclear Energy is a better choice for meeting increasing demand. Do you agree or disagree?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Some people think that success in life comes from hard work and determination, while other think that there are more important factors such as money and appearance. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some people argue that the purpose of zoos is only to entertain people. Do you agree or disagree?

With increasing populations and ever growing urban centres, many countries are losing their natural beauty spots. What benefits are there to protect places of natural beauty? How can this be solved?

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