Nuclear Energy is a better choice for meeting increasing demand. Do you agree or disagree?

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and competitive debates have been held on the topic of
the
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nuclear
energy
. What are the advantages and disadvantages of using nuclear plants? What consequences can it have? In
this
essay
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I will put forward
this
subject and justify both sides. It is known everywhere that the nuclei
power
is an extreme downpour and if not utilized and looked after properly, it may have tearing consequences. Take,
for example
, the tragedy of
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nuclei
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power
plant in Chernobyl, Ukraine 1986. The explosion was destructive and caused dozens of people to experience serious radiation sickness and contamination. What’s
more
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is that the area with vegetation had been poisoned as well and until now children
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born with congenital defects
due to
that disastrous event.
Similar
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situation happened in the cities of Hiroshima and Nagasaki (Japan, 1945), except,
this
time the atomic bomb was thrown intentionally by America. From the previous examples we can conclude that nuclear
power
is hazardous weaponry,
however
, it can be
also
operated in a more reasonable way,
for instance
, as one of the most sufficient and sustainable sources of
energy
. Nuclei plants are full of usefulness in
aspect
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the aspect
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of generating
power
. The sustainability, resourcefulness, harmlessness and safety in total build up a flawless
energy
source. Japan, North Korea, USA and UK are already utilizing
this
technology, and there are plenty of reasons for doing so. Because nuclear
power
represents its full capacity only in the form of heat and radiation it does not damage our ecosystem even a little.
Additionally
, its abilities are almost infinite,
due to
the chain reaction of splitting atoms, its source never runs up and it
tuns
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out extraordinarily
inexpensive
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. Nuclear
energy
and plants are especially essential in our modern world.
Due to
industrialization, globalization and other
factors
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factors,
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it is desired as it had never been.
However
, we must know the facets and scopes of
such
uncertain and perilous things because if we do not, the cost of it might be tremendous.
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