You should spend about 40 mins. Write about the following topic: Some believe that we should invent a new language for international communication. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, there are
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significant
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of languages
that
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some of
them
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which
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are
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common
and others are less
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common
. Some
people
think that a new
language
has to be invented for international interaction. I totally disagree with
this
point and believe the demerits overshadow its merits.
This
essay will discuss both in detail. On the one hand, there are some plus points in the invention of new
language
.
Firstly
,
people
can reach
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agreement about
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building
the
language
with comfortable rules
due to
it
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learnt easily.
For example
, some international languages like Arabic
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numerous structures that make it hard to teach.
In addition
, we can reduce the number of vocabulary that has
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meaning.
Therefore
, learning
this
language
can take
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time than
other live
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language
.
On the other hand
, the invention of a new
language
has several grave consequences.
To begin
with,
English
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language
has been accepted all around the world as the international
language
and numerous
people
can interact well with
eachother
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each other
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this
language
, it is
challenging
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a challenging
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issue for them to learn a new
language
to communicate. Take older
people
as an example, innumerable older are working
through
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English
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language
in international companies and they are not interested in learning
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language
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this
age.
Moreover
,
people
all around the world probably will be in conflict about the rules and the
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vocabulary
of
this
language
.
As a result
, it can be
certianly
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certainly
said that there exist several negative aspects in
this
issue. All things considered,
although
there are some advantages concerning inventing
a new languages
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a new language
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, it would generally cause us to fall
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challenging
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the challenging
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situation
due to
factors
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mentioned above. So
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strongly believe that the pros outweigh the cons.
Submitted by behshad_arabzadeh on

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