An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with this situation?
Huge
number of specialists, like doctors and professors are abandoning their own poor Change the article
A huge
The huge
nation
to Fix the agreement mistake
nations
work
in developed countries. As a result
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the long
long term
goals of the nation could be compromised. And so, Add a hyphen
long-term
government
should facilitate individuals contributing more to an Add an article
the government
economy
.
Firstly
, professional
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professionals
such
as a teacher, would be creating future technicians, engineers, and other specialists, if that professional is not present in the future, than
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then
economy
would worsen and Add an article
the economy
thus
, productivity would plummet. Thus
, the country
would have to recruit foreign experts and pay handsomely to get them to work
in the country
. As a result
, economy
of the Add an article
the economy
country
would worsen over time. Subsequently
, long term
aims Add a hyphen
long-term
such
as to rectify
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rectifying
current
account, Correct article usage
the current
achieve
income stability and full Wrong verb form
achieving
employement
could be compromised. Correct your spelling
employment
For instance
, experts leaving Pakistan has caused companies and organisations to suffer heavy losses and thus
have become burden
to the Add an article
a burden
economy
.
Nevertheless
, perks such
as high salaries, house
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housing
promotion
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promotions
free-fuel
can tempt those individuals to stay in their home Correct your spelling
free fuel
country
and work
here. For example
, Chinese
government facilitates experts and Correct article usage
the Chinese
this
technique has worked wonderfully-well
for them, as China is currently one of the biggest Correct your spelling
wonderfully well
exporter
of various goods.
Change to a plural noun
exporters
To sum up
, Every individual is looking to achieve career advancement and by providing facilities to specialist individuals, poorer
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the poorer
a poorer
country
can get them to stay and Fix the agreement mistake
countries
work
for the economy
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