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The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average numbers of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities.

The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average numbers of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities.
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The line graph and the table display the average of daylight and
temperatures
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 in a
year
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 in three different cities.
While
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 New York and London reach their highest
temperatures
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 during the second and third
trimester
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trimesters
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 of the
year
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, Sydney has the highest
temperatures
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 from October through March. London has shorter days than New York and Sydney at least 1,293 hours less of daylight per
year
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.
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, London is the second city with the lowest
temperatures
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 during
winter
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 with about 9
degrees
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 in January.
On the other hand
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, it is New York with the longest days. During summer it has the highest
temperatures
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, reaching almost 30
degrees
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 in July. But during the
winter
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reach
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the lowest
temperatures
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 between the three cities, just over 5
degrees
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. Sydney has the
second highest
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second-highest
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 average sunshine hours, with 2,473 hours per
year
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.
In addition
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, Sydne's temperature has only 10
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degrees
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10-degree
 difference between summer and
winter
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, reaching over 25
degrees
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 in Summer and over 15
degrees
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 in
Winter
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words temperatures, year, winter, degrees with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly temperatures
  • annual sunshine hours
  • temperature fluctuation
  • degrees Celsius/Fahrenheit
  • climatic patterns
  • geographical location
  • seasonal variation
  • meteorological data
  • inhabitants' lifestyle
  • tourism industry
  • seasonal activities
  • thermal comfort
  • climate zone
  • sunlight exposure
  • weather trends
  • correlation
  • biodiversity
  • eco-system
  • temperate climate
  • tropical climate
  • desert climate
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