The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the cost of adult education should be shared.
The combination of bar and pie chart illustrates the result of
survey
as well Add an article
the survey
a survey
reasons
why adults decided to study and how the Correct word choice
as reasons
cost
of adult education should be shared respectively. The data has been calibrated in percentage.
Overall
, it is clearly seen that the highest proportion of people decided to study their interested subjects and the lowest percentage of amount
was shared Add an article
the amount
in
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by
taxpayer
.
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taxpayers
According to
the given data, 40% of individuals want to study their favourite subjects. Followed by 38% who want to gain qualifications. Thus
, masses
who want to improve their prospects of promotion and who enjoy learning share the same percentile of 20. Correct article usage
the masses
Lastly
, 9% people
decided to learn to meet people.
Moving Change preposition
of people
further
, 40% of individuals want to shared
the Change the verb
share
cost
of each course. Therefore
, 25% of cost
was shared Add an article
the cost
on
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with
taxpayer
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the taxpayer
while
,
the Remove the comma
apply
cost
of each course shared
35% Add a missing verb
was shared
on
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with
employer
.Add an article
the employer
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cost with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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