The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the cost of adult education should be shared.

The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the cost of adult education should be shared.
The combination of bar and pie chart illustrates the result of
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the survey
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as well
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why adults decided to study and how the
cost
of adult education should be shared respectively. The data has been calibrated in percentage.
Overall
, it is clearly seen that the highest proportion of people decided to study their interested subjects and the lowest percentage of
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was shared
in
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According to
the given data, 40% of individuals want to study their favourite subjects. Followed by 38% who want to gain qualifications.
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,
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who want to improve their prospects of promotion and who enjoy learning share the same percentile of 20.
Lastly
, 9%
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decided to learn to meet people. Moving
further
, 40% of individuals want to
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the
cost
of each course.
Therefore
, 25% of
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the cost
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was shared
on
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taxpayer
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the taxpayer
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while
,
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the
cost
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shared
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was shared
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35%
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employer
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the employer
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cost with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Adult education
  • Lifelong learning
  • Professional development
  • Survey results
  • Pie chart
  • Career advancement
  • Personal development
  • Subsidies
  • Cost-sharing
  • Funding models
  • Government grants
  • Private sector investment
  • Work-study balance
  • Financial aid
  • Continuing education
  • Taxpayer contribution
  • Upskilling
  • Reskilling
  • Professional qualifications
  • Vocational training
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