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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table show where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table show where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
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The table chart illustrates the
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budget
 of police in one area of Britain.
Whereas
, the pie graph shows how the money was spent in the years
of
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2017 and 2018. The data has been calibrated in terms of
millions
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percentage
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 respectively.
Overall
, it is clearly seen that the police
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budget
 has been increased in 2018,
while
 the least amount was spent on technology.
According to
 the given data, in 2017 the police
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budget
 in
National
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the National
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 government was 175.5
millions
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million
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, but
is
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it
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 showed a slight increase in the year
of
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2018.
Moreover
, other sources
such
 as grants have the same number of
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bugs
 38
millions
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million
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.
Thus
,
total
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 cost was 304.7
millions
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million
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 and 318.6
millions
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million
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 in
the
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both years. Moving
further
, the highest amount was spent on
salaries
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the salaries
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 of officers and staff in
the
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both given years.
Therefore
, the least cost was
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 in technology in 2017.
Lastly
,
bulidings
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buildings
building
 and transport share the same proportion of expenditure 17% in 2017 and 2018.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words bugdet, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • fiscal year
  • government grants
  • local taxes
  • police force
  • patrol division
  • detective units
  • traffic control
  • administration expenses
  • operational costs
  • capital expenditure
  • revenue streams
  • expenditure distribution
  • financial resources
  • public safety
  • crime prevention
  • budgetary constraints
  • funding shortfall
  • budget surplus
  • financial planning
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