More and more people are stressed today than ever before. What are the causes of this stress? Can you suggest some possible solutions?

Nowadays it becomes natural that a person must do better for their family, their kids, or their companies.
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stress
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and show what can be done to release the tension. There are mainly
two
factors that cause an individual depression.
First,
society
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to demand more and more from other people without analysing their partner’s mental status.
Moreover
, if we look closer, the exaggerated push is coming from our nearest human being. It can be our close friends, even our family.
For example
, imagine if the negative emotions are from our spouse or our employee,
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we meet almost every day.
Second,
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the
extrinsic aspect, the most dangerous source of
this
thought is from our own
mind
. If we
cancould not
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cannot
control our perspective toward ourselves, we will only see the bad sides of our life.
Hence
, we would force our
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to create something irrational and
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this
situation will
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our
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. These are
two
factors that could raise our stress level by
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.
On the other hand
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the solutions would be always available. There are
two
biggest possible acts to relieve the pressure.
First,
we can consult our problem
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a professional. There is
psychiatrist
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or spiritual teacher whom we respect and trust to listen to our matters.
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ventilation, a way to drive the cloud out of our
mind
so we would have a clearer vision
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how to behave.
For instance
, if we have a problem with our peers in
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, we have a manager who works longer than us that could
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us a resolution even for a specific issue. Another solution is to do our hobbies. Many activities that would not drain our bank account
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as
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some sport. These
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activities
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proved to be the one of most effective ways to alleviate our fatigue.
Therefore
, doing some 6000 steps a day would give us additional energy.
However
, These are the best
two
suggestions to let out the gloom in our
brain
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. In conclusion, stress is a result of demand from our society and from ourselves,
while
it can vanish with some sessions of nice conversation with trusted individual
also
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and strengthen our body and
mind
with physical activities.
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