It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance, for sports or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sportsperson or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is that some people argue that
talent
is a natural gift, while
others believe that anyone can become an excellent achiever through guidance, dedication, and hard work
. However
, there is no absolute agreement on whether talent
can chose
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person
or not.
A commonly held belief is that Add an article
a person
talent
is only
word and to Add an article
the only
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success,
success
you need to go to the courses and Replace the word
succeed
work
with the trainer. As the
evidence of Correct article usage
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this
they point to Mozart`s friend. Add a comma
this,
For example
, his friend have
his first opera after 12 years Wrong verb form
had
work
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of work
Furthermore
, compared with Mozart he have
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has
flourish
after enormous complex Change the verb form
flourished
work
with music. It could be explained by the fact that,
what we should do is find and open Remove the comma
apply
this
«talent
» in ourselves.
On the other hand
, some people claim that prodigy
is the real thing and it may Correct article usage
a prodigy
provide
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For
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they may Add a comma
example,
mentioned
that if one or both parents are prodigies, the children will have the gene, too. Change the verb form
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be mentioned
In
addition
Mozart has a Add a comma
addition,
talent
and he was more connected with music as a child. The explanation lies in the fact that Mozart had more opportunities, only because of
he was born with Change preposition
apply
talent
. Therefore
, he quickly became popular and achieved more triumph than his friend.
In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into account I would assume that genetic qualities and proper guidelines can make a person famous. Extraordinary prodigy in music, art, sports, math, and any other field is the product of both genetic, continuous improvement and environmental factors.Submitted by dnm.best on
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