The crime rate has increased dramatically in many countries. Discuss some possible reasons for this increase and suggest solutions to this problem
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task achievement
It is essential to stay on topic throughout your essay. The prompt was about crime rates, but your essay discussed climate change. Make sure to address the task directly that you are given to show task achievement. This means discussing the reasons for increased crime rates and suggesting solutions, which was the original essay question you were presented with.
coherence cohesion
Your response shows a need for improvement in logical structuring. The essay should begin with an introduction that addresses the question, followed by logically ordered paragraphs that tackle specific aspects of the topic, and conclude with a summary of your points and restatement of your position. Use clear topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph.
coherence cohesion
Make sure your introduction and conclusion are clear and present your thesis and summarise your main points, respectively. It is important to keep these parts of your essay focused and relevant to the topic. Each paragraph should also include relevant examples to support your points. Avoid unrelated examples or generic statements that do not add depth to your argument.
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