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The use of social media, such as Facebook and Twitter, is replacing face-to-face contact in this century. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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In
this
 century, social
media
 is becoming a primary
tools
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 for communication rather than to meet in person or
a
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place . As stated, both Facebook and Twitter offer us a way to communicate from far away and open the possibility of reaching much larger audiences.
This
 is a big advantage, in my opinion. First of all, we still
be
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 able to connect with people without concerning time and distance.
In other words
, even if someone
in
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 another country, we still can communicate with them without having to fly over, which saves our money and time. That's why social
media
 helps us a lot in a way to communicate practically.
Secondly
, social
media
 allows us to directly send and receive a message, so the other person can
also
 receive it
real-time
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.
For example
, if there is a natural
disasters
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 or an accident, we can
got
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 the words through social
media
 in no time and the awareness of authorities that can
helps
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 right away.
Thus
, the presence of social
media
 provides us, as a society,
broader
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 and faster way of communication.
To conclude
, I absolutely believe that social
media
 bring more advantages and can replace face-to-face communication in certain ways, but it does not
necessarilly
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necessarily
 erase the essence of talking directly face-to-face. As long as we can get the point of the messages
straightly
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.
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