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The graph below shows that the percentages of Australian export to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

The graph below shows that the percentages of Australian export to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012
#percentages #australian #export #countries
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the percentage of
export
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exports
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 to four countries
since
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from
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 1990 to 2012. Regarding the
first
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 year of the report (1990), Japan had the
first
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place
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 by far other countries at about 26.
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,
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the US
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 held the second position at just over 11.
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, China was in
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last
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place
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 and it was closely followed by
India
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 and
bothe
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both
 of them were around 3 to 4. In regard
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to Japan
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, Japan started
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the
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first
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place
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 but it was in
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second
place
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at
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 the
last
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 year of the record.
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,
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India
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 was almost at the
last
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 position at the beginning, it was in the
first
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place
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 at the 2012.
US
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The US
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 had second
place
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 but after a wide range of fluctuation during
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this
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these
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 22 years,
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at
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in
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 the
end
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end,
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 it was
at
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the
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thirs
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third
this
place
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.
India
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 was flat
at
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 the
first
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 10 years but after
that
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that,
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 it started
ti raise
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to rise
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 gradually.
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, even though
India
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 had
huge
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a huge
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 jump from
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last
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 position to the
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first
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, almost all the countries stayed at their places.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words first, place, india with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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