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An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadventages for both individuals and companies to shopping online?

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A majority of
people
 take
priorty
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priority
 over buying something which they do not need online, it can be caused
wasting
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 money and energy
for
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on
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 a group of things which are unnecessary for
human's
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human
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life
while
compaines
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companies
 are provided more overcomes than
last
 years. Opinions are divided and
this
 essay shows
benefits
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the benefits
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 and drawbacks of it. First of all, the person who is living in
21st
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 century is an essential part of
technology
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the technology
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 world and online shopping came
to
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into
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 our lives with it.
People
 can find anything which they need and
compaines
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companies
 advertise themselves easily,
it
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which
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 helps
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the developing
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developing
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process
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the process
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 of investors, especially small ones.
On the other hand
 e-shop is a type of earning time for humans who
have
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hard-working
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hard
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tempt
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and cannot find free time
for getting
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to get
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 their daily products. For
exapmle
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example
, Trendyol, the online platform where you can find everything; clothes, food, household items etc is used by approximately 2
bilion
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billion
million
people
 and
this
 number
increase
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 day by day
for making
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to make
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easier
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it easier
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to
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for
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people
's
life
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lives
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.
Secondly
, online shopping
takes
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 many problems with it,
however
,
people
 maintain to utilize it
frequetly
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frequently
. Nowadays, it is common knowledge that online shopping is providing capitalism and wasting budgets extremely for numerous items which somebody can use
it
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apply
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3 or
maximum
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a maximum
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5
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of 5
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times. The downside of
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is that significant parts of
life
such
 as
sience
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science
, inventions, literature etc. commence to replace their importance with
the
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other unimportant things.
For example
, the media of Baku State University writes that students of
this
 university
spends
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their
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3-4 hours
in
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a day on
the
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online shopping apps,
this
 is
warming
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a warming
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 call for us.
To conclude
,
while
 it has conveniences and handicaps, online shopping plays a crucial role in humans'
life
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lives
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 and
it is clear that
 today the figure for users
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it
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is growing markedly.
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task achievement
Ensure you fully understand the prompt and directly address the advantages and disadvantages asked. Your essay must maintain focus on these specific aspects for individuals and companies, along with providing specific, detailed examples.
coherence and cohesion
Work on constructing clear topic sentences for each paragraph and use cohesive devices accurately to guide the reader through your argument. Make sure your essay has a logical progression from the introduction through to the conclusion.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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