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some people believe that university students should pay all the cost of studies because university education only benefits students themselves not the society as a whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #university #students #cost #studies #education #society
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it
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 May Concern My name is Dmitry and I am moving to Thailand with my wife Olesya, we do not have kids
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 pets. We are going to move from Turkey to Pattaya in January. I have a remote job that allows me to live in any country, so we chose Thailand for the next year. We are looking for
accomodation
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accommodation
 in Pattaya, not far from the sea, but not too close to
city
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the city
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center
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, because it is too
noizy
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noisy
. I hope you can offer a few variants located near malls or other places like coworking or cafes, where I can spend time working.
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, we are
planing
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planning
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 to join language courses, but my wife does not like to ride a bike,
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 near any language school will be brilliant. The best option could be 2+1 or 1+1
furnitured
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furnished
 apartments, higher
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than then
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then
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the
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 5th floor.
Gym
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The gym
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 and swimming pool
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must be in the
residental
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residential
 complex or close enough.
Sea
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 view is preferable but not obligatory. Thank you for your attention. Sincerely, Dmitry.
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task response
You must respond directly to the given task, providing your opinion on whether university education should be funded by students alone, discussing both the individual and societal impact.
coherence cohesion
Develop your ideas fully with a clear structure, including an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Each paragraph should present a centrally focused idea that contributes to the overall argument or position you are taking on the question.
coherence cohesion
Use a range of linking words and phrases to ensure your ideas flow logically from one to the next, making your position and argument clear.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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