A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. he/she has askedfor your advice. write a letter to your friend. In your letter explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer.
Dear Ali,
I hope you are doing well. I just got your letter yesterday, in which you
share
your thoughts on going Wrong verb form
shared
to
a camping Change preposition
on
trip
holiday. I am so happy and excited to read your letter regarding your tour
and want to share my opinion on this
as well.
To begin
with, my personal suggestion to you on this
tour
is to select a place which is not so hot in this
summer season so you can enjoy your trip
without getting exhuast
and Correct your spelling
exhausted
exhaust
secondly
, make a list of a
essential items which you may need on you Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
tour
holiday so you do not miss anything and does not face difficulty.
However
, I was also
planning to go on a camping trip
in this
summer holidays but now suddenly a very close family wedding function has to be happen
in Change the verb form
happen
coming
summer holidays so , my plan of going Correct article usage
the coming
to
the Change preposition
on
tour
has been postponed but i
wish you a safe and happy Change the capitalization
I
trip
ahead and keep in touch with me so, i
can inquire your well being.
yours sincerely,
Ramisha.Change the capitalization
I
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Task Achievement
The letter needs to address all parts of the prompt more explicitly. It should clearly explain why you think your friend would enjoy camping, describe some possible disadvantages, and state if you would like to join them.
Coherence and Cohesion
The logical structure of the letter could be improved by organizing the content into clear paragraphs, each with a single idea. This would greatly enhance readability and coherence.
Coherence and Cohesion
The greeting is casual; it could be improved by using 'Dear [Friend's Name],'. The closing lacks the warmth expected in a friendly letter; consider using 'Best wishes' or 'Looking forward to hearing from you soon'.
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