A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. he/she has askedfor your advice. write a letter to your friend. In your letter explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer.

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Dear Ali, I hope you are doing well. I just got your letter yesterday, in which you

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shared

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your thoughts on going

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a camping

trip

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holiday. I am so happy and excited to read your letter regarding your

tour

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and want to share my opinion on

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as well.

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with, my personal suggestion to you on

this

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tour

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is to select a place which is not so hot in

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summer season so you can enjoy your

trip

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without getting

exhuast

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exhausted

exhaust

and

secondly

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, make a list of

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essential items which you may need on you

tour

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holiday so you do not miss anything and does not face difficulty.

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, I was

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planning to go on a camping

trip

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this

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summer holidays but now suddenly a very close family wedding function has to

be happen

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coming

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the coming

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summer holidays so , my plan of going

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the

tour

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has been postponed but

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wish you a safe and happy

trip

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ahead and keep in touch with me so,

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can inquire your well being. yours sincerely, Ramisha.

Submitted by ramisha.ejaz23 on Wed Nov 22 2023

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Task Achievement

The letter needs to address all parts of the prompt more explicitly. It should clearly explain why you think your friend would enjoy camping, describe some possible disadvantages, and state if you would like to join them.

Coherence and Cohesion

The logical structure of the letter could be improved by organizing the content into clear paragraphs, each with a single idea. This would greatly enhance readability and coherence.

Coherence and Cohesion

The greeting is casual; it could be improved by using 'Dear [Friend's Name],'. The closing lacks the warmth expected in a friendly letter; consider using 'Best wishes' or 'Looking forward to hearing from you soon'.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

182 words

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