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The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. » Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. » Write at least 150 words.
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The given line graph illustrates the difference in the value of
wheat
exports
 in 3 different nations including Australia, Canada and
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 Community from 1985 to 1990.
Overall
, it is clearly observed that the figure
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wheat
exports
 was by far
lowest
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 during the research period.
Moreover
, the data
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 three different countries experienced significant fluctuations over the given period. In specific, the amount of
wheat
 exported by Canada witnessed a trivial decline to over 15
millions
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tonnes
 from 1985 to 1988, reaching a peak at 25
millions
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tonnes
 in the next 2 years. Afterwards,
this
 number
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dramatically dropped to under 15 million
tonnes
 in 1989 before rising rapidly
at the end
 of the period.
In addition
,
European
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the European
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 community’s
wheat
exports
, which decreased slightly from approximately 16 to just under 15
millions
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tonnes
 in 1986, continued to drop gradually to about 10
millions
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million
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tonnes
 over 6 years. Another noticeable point is that There was a small climb from 15 to roughly 16
millions
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million
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tonnes
 in the value of Australia’s
wheat
exports
 from 1985 to 1986, followed by a steady decline
by
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 over 10
millions
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million
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tonnes
 in the
last
 4 years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words wheat, exports, millions, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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