The charts below show the average temperatures in 12 months in three cities and how many hours of sunshine these cities have in a year.
The charts compare the standard temperatures in
London
, New York
and Sydney
and the hours
of sunshine in the same cities per year
.
Overall
, New York
is the sunniest destination, compared to the other two cities, whereas
London
has less sunnier days. However
, Sydney
is the warmest at the start of the year
as well as
at the end
of the period.
To begin
, Sydney
includes 2473 annual shiny hours
, reaching slightly above 25 degrees in January, representing the brightest city among the others. Even though,
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this
number has dropped in Jule (slighly
higher than 15), it went back to 25 in November and December. New Correct your spelling
slightly
York
is the most golden location (2535 sunshine hours
), starting from just about 5 degrees, but rising to 30 in July, illustrating the hottest period of time in a year
.
On the other hand
, London
has only 1180 bright hours
yearly, achieving the maximum temperature of 24 to 25 in July and August. Despite the fact that London
was the grayest
city, it is still sunnier than New Change the spelling
greyest
York
(5 degrees) at the end
of the year
, at just lower than 10. Regadless
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Regardless
York
is being
the hottest city, Unnecessary verb
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Sydney
is the best to visit in January, Febrary
, March, November and December.Correct your spelling
February
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