The charts below show the average temperatures in 12 months in three cities and how many hours of sunshine these cities have in a year.

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The charts compare the standard temperatures in

London

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, New

York

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and

Sydney

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and the

hours

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of sunshine in the same cities per

year

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Overall

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, New

York

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is the sunniest destination, compared to the other two cities,

whereas

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London

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has less sunnier days.

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Sydney

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is the warmest at the start of the

year

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as well as

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at the end

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of the period.

To begin

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Sydney

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includes 2473 annual shiny

hours

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, reaching slightly above 25 degrees in January, representing the brightest city among the others. Even though

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this

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number has dropped in Jule (

slighly

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slightly

higher than 15), it went back to 25 in November and December. New

York

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is the most golden location (2535 sunshine

hours

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), starting from just about 5 degrees, but rising to 30 in July, illustrating the hottest period of time in a

year

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On the other hand

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London

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has only 1180 bright

hours

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yearly, achieving the maximum temperature of 24 to 25 in July and August. Despite the fact that

London

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was the

grayest

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city, it is still sunnier than New

York

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(5 degrees)

at the end

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of the

year

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, at just lower than 10.

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Regardless

New

York

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being

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the hottest city,

Sydney

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is the best to visit in January,

Febrary

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February

, March, November and December.

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The charts below show the average temperatures in 12 months in three cities and how many hours of sunshine these cities have in a year.

Computers and A.I. technology are increasingly being used for online education. Can artificial intelligence enhance the learning experience? Is this a positive or negative development?

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