The charts below show the average temperatures in 12 months in three cities and how many hours of sunshine these cities have in a year.
The line chart illustrates the average
temperature
in three different cities
such
as,
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London
, New York
, and Sydney in 12 months. The table also
illustrates the total hours
of sunshine in three different cities
for one year
.
In April, Sydney experienced a downfall in the temperature
until July it reached just over 15 degrees
and this
marked the lowest point for one whole year
. Meanwhile, Both London
and New York
are experiencing an upward trend with the temperature
keep rising from January until July. In July, both cities
are reaching
the highest degree of Wrong verb form
reached
the
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temperature
, with London
over
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at over
degrees
and New York
almost
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at almost
degrees
. However
, from July to December, both cities
' temperatures get lower and eventually, New York
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York's
temperature
is just 5 degrees
in December which is the lowest among the others. Not only New York
but London
also
faces cool weather with just almost 10 degrees
at the end
of the year
. In contrast
, Sydneys'
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Sydney's
Sydneys'
temperature
rose sharply and by the end of the year
, the temperature
had rose
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risen
until
25 Change preposition
to
degrees
.
The total sunshine that New York
receives is 2,535 hours
which is the highest compared to other cities
. Less than 62 hours
of sunlight is received by people who live in Sydney. In contrast
, there is a 1,355-hour difference between London
and New York
which means that people in London
receive less than 1,355 hours
of sun light
compared to New Yorkers.Correct your spelling
sunlight
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