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The chart below give information about level of education in Glasgow,a city in Scotland, in 2010.

The chart below give information about level of education in Glasgow,a city in Scotland, in 2010.
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The bar chart and pie charts compare data about education levels by gender and age range in Glasgow
city
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 where located in Scotland in 2010.
Overall
,
majority
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the majority
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 of
youngers
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young people
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 showed the
significant
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apply
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highest figure for having a
university
degree
, when elders did not have much qualification. But there are small
difference
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differences
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 in educational
level
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levels
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 between women and men.
People
of
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between 16
years
 and 50
years
 have around 76% for
university
degree
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degrees
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while
 9% of
people
 were not qualified. From 16
years
 to 20
years
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years,
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 individuals showed about 20% of school
certificate
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certificates
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 as educational
level
.
Although
one fourth
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 of above 75
years
 persons have
university
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a university
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degree
, 72%
have
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do have
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 not any
qualification
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qualifications
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. In one second of age 50
years
 to 75
years
people
 earned a
university
degree
,
when
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while
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 30% of
people
 in
this
 category
being
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are
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 not qualified. In the pie charts,
contribution
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the contribution
a contribution
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 from
educational
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the educational
an educational
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level
 of school certificate remained constant rate in male and female. In 2010 educational
level
 of
university
degree
 from men and women were at 32% and 29% respectively. Between 30% to 40% of men and women showed as
non qualified
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non-qualified
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words university, degree, level, people, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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