The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 to 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between  1920 to 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two line graphs illustrate the percentage of households that had three different electrical devices and how frequently they used them per house per week over a period of 100
years
.
Although
the ownership of these appliances increased remarkably, the rate of using them went down to a great extent in
this
time period.
According to
the first graph, 40% and 30% of people used washing machines and
vacuum
cleaners
, respectively, and almost 2% of individuals tended to have
refrigerators
in their homes by 1920. After 20
years
, the ownership percentage of
refrigerators
passed
vacuum
cleaners
and reached almost 53%, but it was still lower than washing machines. All three appliances usage increased and owning a refrigerator was the greatest with almost 90% of households by 1960.
Then
,
Although
refrigerators
and
vacuum
cleaners
experienced the same ascending trend, washing machine ownership reduced from 70% to 65%. During the next 40
years
,
this
Correct determiner usage
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three electrical device reached their peak and you could find
refrigerators
and
vacuum
cleaners
in every house and almost 72% of individuals had washing machines. Based on the second graph, people used the greatest amount of hours per week by 1920.
Then
it reduced to 35, 20 and 18 hours per week, in the next 60
years
, respectively. It remained static by 2000 and
then
it reached the lowest amount in 2019.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
Vocabulary: Replace the words years, vacuum, cleaners, refrigerators with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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