106.Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
Some say that the extinction of some
animals
and plant species is the main environmental issue, Use synonyms
while
others argue that there are other more urgent environmental complications. Linking Words
This
essay will argue that Linking Words
although
the disappearance of Linking Words
animals
and Use synonyms
plants
can Use synonyms
cause
chaos in biodiversity and life danger, Use synonyms
pollution
and climate change are major Use synonyms
problems
.
On the one hand, animal extinction can lead to issues in other Use synonyms
animals
' life processes. Use synonyms
This
is because all Linking Words
animals
have their own way of surviving, hunting, reproducing and feeding. Use synonyms
Then
, the disappearance of an animal will Linking Words
cause
alteration, Use synonyms
such
as an excessive amount of the food that these Linking Words
animals
ate, Use synonyms
while
those Linking Words
animals
which feed on these "extinct Use synonyms
animals
" will die of hunger. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, Linking Words
plants
are essential for humans' lives. The reason for Use synonyms
this
is that they provide oxygen, which people and other living things need to survive. Linking Words
For example
, Linking Words
according to
scientists around 300 to 500 Linking Words
plants
are needed to provide oxygen to one person, Use synonyms
then
if the number of Linking Words
plants
is reduced, there might not be sufficient oxygen for everyone. Use synonyms
However
, I believe that by solving more urgent environmental Linking Words
problems
, these issues will be solved too.
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On the other hand
, global warming and Linking Words
pollution
lead to the destruction of ecosystems. Use synonyms
This
is because changing climatic conditions Linking Words
as well as
the increasing amount of carbon dioxide caused by contamination will Linking Words
cause
scarcity in freshwater sources, food, energy resources and fuel, which all can cost humans' lives. Use synonyms
Also
, Linking Words
this
issue leads to air Linking Words
pollution
, in which air quality is reduced, and Use synonyms
this
causes diseases related to the respiratory system, Linking Words
such
as asthma or lung cancer. Recent research concluded that during the Linking Words
last
4 years, asthma cases in highly polluted countries, increased by approximately 31%. In my opinion, solving these complications is the key to solving all environmental Linking Words
problems
.
In conclusion, Use synonyms
although
the extinction of Linking Words
animals
and Use synonyms
plants
can Use synonyms
cause
issues to other living things and put people's lives in danger, by solving global warming and Use synonyms
pollution
, Use synonyms
problems
related to the environment will be solved, and I, Use synonyms
therefore
, believe that Linking Words
this
point of view is more important.Linking Words
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