The two diagrams below describe changes to a museum's floor plan between 2008 and 2012.
The diagram compares the development of a museum from 2008 to 2012. The most noticeable changes are the increases in the number of floors and facilities throughout the year and the replacement of stairs with a lift.
In 2008, a pathway connected to the museum entrance led to a reception right beside a reading
room
. At one level below, a staircase was spotted in between a changing room
and a store. Furthermore
, a gallery was located in
the west side of the building.
After the renovation in 2012, the location and sizes of the path, gallery, shop, and reading Change preposition
on
room
remained constant. However
, the stairs were removed and a lift that climbs to 4th floor was added. Furthermore
, the museum entry became a hallway and the reception was rebuilt to reduce its size and merged
with Wrong verb form
merge
cloakroom
. In the east of the ground floor, the old cloakroom was replaced by a playground. On the third floor, an outdoor Correct article usage
the cloakroom
terace
was on the left of a new restaurant and a self-service cafe was situated next to the lift. Correct your spelling
terrace
In contrast
, the highest level occupied a small area, it had an exhibition room
which was one-third the size of other floors.Submitted by dharyuschen12 on
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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