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two maps shows the differences of two decades during the period of time

two maps shows the differences of two decades during the period of time
The two maps demonstrate the main changes which have taken place in
village
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the village
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park
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 during the 10-year period. Over the period, the village
park
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 witnessed dramatic changes and transformed into
more
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a more
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 modern
area
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. One
area
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 which has seen big improvements is
cark
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Cark Park
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park
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.
Parking
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The parking
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area
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 has been expanded for 50 cars which was
place
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a place
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 for 20 cars. Another interesting thing is that
a
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the
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 tennis court has been double expanded.
Also
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children
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children's
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 play
area
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 which is located in the north-east of the
park
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were
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was
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 reconstructed into two areas,
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the children
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children
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children's
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 play
area
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 and
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the children
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children
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children's
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 soft play
area
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.
Also
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 near the
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children
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children's
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 soft play
area
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 has been built a toilet. The big football pitch which was located in the centre of the
park
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 has been reconstructed into
smaller
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a smaller
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 one. Another striking change is that in the south-west of the
park
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has
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apply
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been built a huge picnic
area
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. The pond in the south-east of the
park
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were
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was
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 redeveloped as a boating lake. A final interesting development is that the forest in the corner of the
park
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 was cut down and a new cafe has been built.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park, area, children with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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