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The chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 comparedwith the average house prices in 1989. Summarise the information by selectingandreporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 comparedwith the average house prices in 1989. Summarise the information by selectingandreporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the figures
of
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for
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avarage
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average
 house prices in five different cities during the
period
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 from 1990 to 2002.
Overall
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, there was an upward trend in the percentage of change of houses during the
period
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 shown almost in all of the cities except for Frankfurt. It can be seen that there was a
considerably
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 fall
by
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 5% in prices in New York between 1990 and 1995. Tokyo and London, which had the same figures, witnessed a dramatic decrease
by
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 about 7% over the same
period
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.
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, the figures for Madrid and Frankfurt were above 0, around 2% and 3% respectively. During the next
period
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 between 1996 and 2002, the figure for London
shown
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showed
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 the biggest change, increasing from -7% to 10%. Pricing of houses
also
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 changed to
better
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the better
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 side in New York and Madrid
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apply
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also
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, where indexes were standing at 5% and 4% respectively.
This
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 rate in Tokyo increased by 2% in comparison with
previous
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the previous
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period
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,
while
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 in Frankfurt decreased by 1%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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