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The graph below shows the sales of children's books, adult fiction and educational books between 2002 and 2006 in one country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the sales of children's books, adult fiction and educational books between 2002 and 2006 in one country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph compares the amount of money
that is
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 earned by selling three different kinds of
books
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 over a period of four years in a country.
Overall
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, educational
books
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 were by far the least important book over the period shown.
In contrast
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,
children
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's
books
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 were the highest in each year except the first year. In 2002, the figure for adult fiction
sales
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 stood at approximately 45
million
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 dollars,
while
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 those
of
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for
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children
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's
books
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 and educational
books
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 were lower at nearly 30 and 25
million
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 dollars, respectively. About half
year
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a year
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 later, the amount of
children
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's
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books
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book
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sales
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 overtook that of adult fiction. There was a steady rise of $25
million
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 in the
children
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's
books
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sales
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 over the whole period.
However
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, the figure for adult fiction
sales
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 saw a decline of $10
million
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 from 2004 to 2006. Between 2004 and 2005, the
sales
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for
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of
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 educational
books
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 fluctuated erratically, after which
it
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they
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 rose substantially by 9
million
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 dollars.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, children, sales, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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