More and more people are using computers and electronic devices to access information. Hence, printing of newspapers and magazines should be stopped. Do you agree or disagree?

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Even though
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an increasing
number of
the
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people
are using computers and other electronic means to get information. I
dont
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don't
agree that
newspaper
and
magazine's
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magazine
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production should come to a halt.
As reading
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Reading
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newspaper
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a newspaper
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is beneficial to a reader and to the stakeholders of the
industry
behind its production.
Firstly
, reading is a hobby which was encouraged by all the
people
in the past and is in the present
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Parents in the past used to build
this
habit in their children. And since
modernisation
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modernisation,
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alot
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a lot
of youngsters has
acess
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access
to electronic devices
such
as mobile phones and laptop and
thus
, have gone away from the habit of reading.
For example
, nowadays online games
such
as pubg and
freefire
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free-fire
free fire
is
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are
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renowned among children, and
has build
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they have built
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the hobby
to play
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of playing
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it
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them
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daily and
further
buried the healthy habit of reading. Halting the production of
newspaper
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newspapers
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would mean cutting ties to the tradition of reading, even though reading a novel and a
newspaper
are different.
Moreover
, some
people
still read newspapers and magazines which may be keeping alive the hope for
people
to revive the reading
habbit
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habit
, as was in the past.
Additionally
, thousands of
people
are employed in the printing
industry
,
stakeholders
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and stakeholders
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such
as employees, directors,
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and messenger
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messenger
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messengers
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to the investors in the printing
industry
would lose if printing of the newspapers and magazines were to
put
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to a halt. Investors has
his
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their
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money invested which would be lost and the employees would lose their job,
their
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and their
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source of income. Not only the directors of the company but every person associated would lose and so printing should not be stopped. In conclusion, even though most
people
are switching to electronic means nowadays,
but
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apply
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newspapers have kept the reading tradition alive still in some
people
, in my opinion.
Moreover
, many
people
still
being
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benefitted
with
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the
industry
would lose if printing were to be stopped.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accessing information
  • Environmentally friendly
  • Sustainable
  • Eco-friendly
  • Cost-effective
  • Convenience
  • Accessibility
  • Interactive
  • Dynamic
  • Multimedia content
  • Space-saving
  • Clutter
  • Digital divide
  • Visual appeal
  • Nostalgia
  • Tactile experience
  • Supporting local businesses
  • Reliable
  • Permanent
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