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All students should study a foreign language in school, starting in their earliest grades. To What extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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Nowadays, many people think that each and every student in school should learn a foreign
language
, starting from their earliest grades. If questioned
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, I would strongly agree with the statement above, a detailed elaboration of my preference is discussed in the following write-ups.
Firstly
, we can say that learning a foreign
language
 is said to be one of the most difficult tasks to do, so foreign languages should be taught at a very young age, as the grasping power of the youths is really fast. One of the most important reasons to learn a new
language
 is, to have smooth communication with everyone,
for instance
 when a
person
 travels and he/she struggles to reach their destination,
then
 they could ask someone for help. Adding to the importance, another important aspect of knowing a foreign
language
 is
economically wise as
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when a
person
 goes for a business deal to market their products,
then
 that
person
 would not be able to convince the buyer if the
person
 is unable to speak their local
language
, so
due to
this
 communication void, the public would have to face difficulties unless they know the most commonly spoken
language
 in the world.
However
, some may argue that
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 there is no need to learn a foreign
language
 as there are translators available everywhere, but the public would not find it convenient to use them, especially to convince someone to buy products. In conclusion, I can say that, the youths should at least learn a few foreign languages, to grow their career globally, as we know there are immense benefits of learning a new
language
. So to implement
this
, the education minister should make learning one foreign
language
 compulsory for every institution.
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