the bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories

the bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories
The bar chart illustrates the distribution of percentages of shares
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spending in Japan , the United States , Canada and the United Kingdom.
Firstly
, it is immediately noticeable that health care and clothing are a consistent minority among other categories . The proportion of the U.S. in the health service
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in
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comparison with different countries - nearly 7% . Canada is the leader in the garments ( more than 5% ) .
In contrast
, the U.S. takes the
last
position ( less than 5% ).
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, food , housing and transportation are a majority among other types of expenditures . Dwelling takes above than 25 % in the U.S. . These indicators are
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approximately 2% than the U.K. which takes the second position . Japan takes the leadership with nearly 25% but consumption in transportation is 10% . On the opposite, different American
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countries
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such
as Canada lead in
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rank with 20%. Looking from an
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perspective,
expenditures
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the expenditures
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of 5 nations are distinguishable compared by ranking.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • categories
  • percentage
  • bar chart
  • allocation
  • distribution
  • consumer spending
  • economic indicator
  • fiscal priorities
  • trend analysis
  • budget allocation
  • disposable income
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