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the graph below shows the number of tourist visiting a particular Caribbean Island between 2010 and 2017.

the graph below shows the number of tourist visiting a particular Caribbean Island between 2010 and 2017.
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The given line chart illustrates the total
visitors
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number of visitors
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 to a Caribbean
Island
 based on the location of their accommodations from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
, a certain Caribbean
Island
experienced
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experiences
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 an increasing number of
visitors
 annually.
Additionally
, the majority of tourists
favored
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favoured
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 staying on the cruise rather than living on the
island
. There were approximately three-quarters of a
million
visitors
 who stayed on a cruise in 2010.
This
 figure remained constant before gradually increasing and doubling its initial value in 2013. The peak of 1.5
million
visitors
 was sustained for over a 3-year
period
. By the end of the
period
, tourists staying on the ships contributed to 1.5
million
, which accounted for about 40% of the total
visitors
 to the Caribbean
Island
.
Moreover
, those who chose to stay on the
island
 were fewer than 500,000
visitors
 at the beginning of the
period
.
This
 value fluctuated until it rose significantly in 2013. It surged from 0.5
million
travelers
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travellers
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 in 2013 to four times that value by the end of the
period
.
Additionally
, in mid-2015, the number of
visitors
 staying on the
island
 surpassed the number staying on cruise ships.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "additionally".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, island, million, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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