In some countries, the role of a mother differs in some ways from the role of a father. Why do you think these differences exist? How might parental roles develop in the future?
Parenting is not an easy task in
this
contemporary society. In some regions, two different roles belong to father
and mother
. Many reasons behind this
situation, sometimes
it will affect Correct word choice
and sometimes
for
the Change preposition
apply
children
's development. In this
essay, I will examine all the perspectives and how the parenting role
should be change
in the future.
Change the verb form
be changed
To begin
, I believe the main reason is
for Unnecessary verb
apply
this
trend is Correct article usage
the influance
influance
of Correct your spelling
influence
the
culture. Many Asian parents have Correct article usage
apply
this
issue more frequently due to
they always follow their culture first. In Asian cultures moslty
priority and respect Correct your spelling
more
given
to Add a missing verb
is given
father
than Correct article usage
the father
mother
. Correct article usage
the mother
For instance
, father
always Correct article usage
the father
think
about the Change the verb form
thinks
finacial
side of the family Correct your spelling
financial
while
mother
Correct article usage
the mother
looking
after their Wrong verb form
looks
children
at home therefore
, children
education, health and social Change noun form
children's
engagment
weight come to Correct your spelling
engagement
mother
's role
. Conversly
, Correct your spelling
Conversely
father
does not Add an article
the father
a father
wanted
much dedication Change the verb form
want
for
the Change preposition
to
children
, he simply provides food and things
to the family. In the Asian culture Correct word choice
other things
mother
's role
is more dedecated
to Correct your spelling
dedicated
family
, she always Correct article usage
the family
give
priority Change the verb form
gives
for
the Change preposition
to
children
not
her life.
As a Add the comma(s)
, not
soution
for Correct your spelling
solution
this
, parenting role
must Fix the agreement mistake
roles
be change
wisely. Both Change the verb form
be changed
parent
have Change to a plural noun
parents
same
Change the article
the same
responsibilty
for the family, no one can escape from Correct your spelling
responsibility
thier
Correct your spelling
their
role
, espacially
fathers. Correct your spelling
especially
For example
, father
can check the child home work when he is at home and help him to finish his work. Add an article
the father
a father
This
aspect will affect children
's development, when they see the
equality Correct article usage
apply
from
their family they will continue Change preposition
in
this
in thier
future too.
In conclusion, Correct your spelling
their
the
equale
parenting Correct your spelling
equal
role
always Fix the agreement mistake
roles
bring
joy to their Change the verb form
brings
famliy
Correct your spelling
families
while
some parents suffer from thier
parenting responsibilities. Parenting is not a short term situation Correct your spelling
their
hense
, both Correct your spelling
hence
father
and mother
have to work together to succeed thier
families.Correct your spelling
their
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